Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when….
- The title is suitable for the text.
- The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
- The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
- The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
- Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.
The Happy To Sad Chimpanzee
3, 2, 1, blast off!!!! 1961 the rocket was going to launch, I was terrified that I was on my own. I felt alone because my owner was leaving me. I heard my owner Jake say “start the countdown”. My heart was pounding like I was goIng to die. When I heard the rocket launch I felt like the first chimp going to space. When I heard Blast off I was moved back like there was a earthquake
underground.
When I got to space the only thing I heard was “Jack are you there”
I said “oooh aaaaa”
Then I heard a song called Sweet Mother.
He said “good luck Ju” and that was the last thing I heard from him. When he left me I was falling asleep. I was dreaming that I didn’t have to go to space and that I was back home with Jake…. I wish I wasn’t used for a science experiment.
65 years later
I woke up and said “why am I here?” and what am I doing here?” I said “I thought that I was with Jake at home” My memory was coming back and I remember why I’m here. I was a test if I was going to survive. But lucky I survived. When I woke up I saw like 500 stars around me. There was a milky way, and I saw the earth. When I saw earth I smiled and reached out to it. Suddenly I was heading to earth. I closed my eyes tightly as I can and it got bumpy. I was falling like I was going to crash but then………
Terra Firma!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I finally landed and I got out of the spaceship and I looked around to see if anyone was there.
I shouted Jake’s name and no one answered.
I was scared no one will come to help me.
Until I heard “ohhh aaaaa”.
When I heard that noise I was thinking it was Jake.
I ran to the noise because I thought it was Jake.
When I got there everyone was staring at me.
I thought that was Jake but it was 1000 chimpanzees staring at me.
The leader said to me “Where do you come from?”. I said “I came from space” I said “Who are you?”
He said “I ask the question around here.”
I asked him 1 more question I said “ Where are the humans that lived here?”
He said to his slaves “grab him and take him to the dungeon”
I ran as fast as I can.
Thwacke
I gasped, the earth meet me on front. A sharp pain burned in my back and I felt the sense of falling in and out of consciousness.
Darkness was coming. But this time for eternity.
My eyes caught a glimpse of something that seemed to take my pain away. It was my photo. But it was out of reach. I used all of what I had left to reach it, and clutch it in my hands.
I unscrewed the faded photo…….. A slow smile grew on my face.
“Sorry Ju! Sorry!”
