My Worst Day Ever (First Draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First Draft

My Worst Day Ever

It was the best afternoon ever on July the 12th. My herd was walking to the amazing lake called Savanna Lake in Africa.  We went to the lake to drink water before the next walk.  I was playing with my two best friends called Jim and Max until Dad came and told me to stay with him.  When I went with my dad my friend's dad told their sons to stay with me too.  I was so glad that their dad  told them to stay with me. Luckily my dad told me to stay with him because I was about to meet my worst enemies. I was thinking about the day that I would hear and meet my worst enemy.  But then my dad saw a pride of lions so we ran away. When the lions saw us run away they started to chase our herd away. I was so frightened that I would die. The lions bit me and pushed me into the lake. I got my leg bitten in the lake until two crocodiles came to me and grabbed one of my legs. The three lions that pushed me into the lake grabbed my two feet at the front. They used me as a long rope playing buffalo war. When the lions got me  one held me and the two others smelled me. I was thinking that was really weird. Then my herd came back for me. One  lion just laid down and two of them ran away to there pride. The lion that just stayed almost got hit from my dad. But he is so lucky that he moved before my dad tried to get him. But when the lion moved he ran away to try and survive. My dad just ran to get it but the lion was just too fast for him.  So my dad just stopped. I felt terrified. But now I feel safe near my herd.

Finally I feel safe around my herd. I am lucky to have a family like this.